If I were to crit anything, it'd to maybe trim down the volume of smoke from the revolver.
Or tack an "I meant to do that" onto it. :) Perhaps there's a huge volume of smoke because it's not earthly smoke - this takes place in some odd alterna-Victorian timeline where the spiritualists and the engineers got together and made some truly frightening weaponry? After all, for a chauvinist pig like that, you want to make sure that it's more than his body that's dead...
Or maybe not, but the idea still makes me smile. :)
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Date: 2005-11-29 04:10 pm (UTC)Or tack an "I meant to do that" onto it. :) Perhaps there's a huge volume of smoke because it's not earthly smoke - this takes place in some odd alterna-Victorian timeline where the spiritualists and the engineers got together and made some truly frightening weaponry? After all, for a chauvinist pig like that, you want to make sure that it's more than his body that's dead...
Or maybe not, but the idea still makes me smile. :)